More Bad News Abroad

[The Year Of The Fox]

http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/article-3142048/British-coach-carrying-30-children-crashed-Belgium-killing-driving-leaving-scores-injured.html

[StanSP]

That is quite bad. Hope those who are injured in it make full recoveries.

 

Bit pissed off at the headline. 

 

Horror in Belgium as British coach carrying 34 children from £31,000-a-year Essex private school crashes, killing the driver and leaving scores injured 

 

 

Sorry, but why does it matter what school it came from or how much they pay? 

 

34 children could be seriously injured and have gone through the trauma & horror of a bus crash (in which it overturned I think) - yet the Mail seem to think it's more important to include how much they pay a year and what kind of school they are from instead. One reason why I hate the Mail. Would they have made such a fuss if the crash involved a lower standard of school?

[Rincewind]

If that is the headline then it is too long. A Headline should be 6/7 words max

 

The school details should be in the text. Final paragraph. The most important part is the health of the children and driver, where it happened and the outcome of the crash.

[DANGEROUS TIGER]

That is quite bad. Hope those who are injured in it make full recoveries.

 

Bit pissed off at the headline. 

 

 

Sorry, but why does it matter what school it came from or how much they pay? 

 

34 children could be seriously injured and have gone through the trauma & horror of a bus crash (in which it overturned I think) - yet the Mail seem to think it's more important to include how much they pay a year and what kind of school they are from instead. One reason why I hate the Mail. Would they have made such a fuss if the crash involved a lower standard of school?

I agree, children are children.

[Thracian]

If that is the headline then it is too long. A Headline should be 6/7 words max

 

The school details should be in the text. Final paragraph. The most important part is the health of the children and driver, where it happened and the outcome of the crash.

You should have been a sub-editor. I read a Shires magazine my sister's writing for the other day and thought it the worst example of presentation I'd ever seen.

Then, minutes later, I saw my local weekly. More headlines like sentences, layout that didn't distinquish the lead story from the subsidiaries and altogether shoddy presentation. About as much impact as a feather duster on a JCB. Ah well, who cares? Roll on the next glass of wine and the football season.